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Review
VN review and score (score affects the amount of stars you get in the rating).
purpose: provide constructive criticism to help the developer improve.
Score Chart =========== [150-125] : ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ [125-100] : ⭐⭐⭐⭐ [100-75] : ⭐⭐⭐ [75-50] : ⭐⭐ [50-0] : ⭐
VN Score: 117.5/150
Applies to version 1.2 [2023/10/08].
Score Breakdown:
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『Visuals』 - 15/20
Images, videos, backgrounds, characters, drawings, animations, etc.
- Good:
- High Resolution.
- Good art style.
- Original character sprites.
- Sprites with multiple expressions.
- Original background edits (oil painting style).
- Background and sprites match.
- Images communicate emotions and complement the narrative.
- Animations and transitions through all the VN.
- Frequent background changes through all the VN.
- Every single asset is credited.
- Neutral:
- Backgrounds provided by third parties.
- Sprites remains in one pose.
- Bad:
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- N/A
- Major (-5pts)
- Different art styles on sprites for secondary characters, most are silhouettes.
- Severe (-10pts)
- N/A
- N/A
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- Good:
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『GUI』 - 17.5/20
Graphic user interface of the VN.
- Good:
- Total GUI Overhaul.
- GUI is unique for the VN.
- Text is legible 90% of the time.
- Neutral:
- N/A
- Bad:
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- White text briefly superposes on bright background on some Celia’s letters.
- Major (-5pts)
- N/A
- Severe (-10pts)
- N/A
- N/A
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- Good:
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『Sound』 - 20/20
Music and sound effects; quality and sound design.
- Good:
- Atmospheric sounds through all the VN.
- Ambient music through all the VN.
- Good sound quality and design.
- Sound communicates emotions and complement the narrative.
- Every single asset is credited.
- Neutral:
- Music and sound effects provided by third parties.
- Music can be edited to do a perfect loop.
- Bad:
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- N/A
- Major (-5pts)
- N/A
- Severe (-10pts)
- N/A
- N/A
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- Good:
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『Story』 - 2.5/20
Spelling, grammar and syntax’s correctness, also, narrative flow and consistency.
- Good:
- Outstanding narrative flow.
- Long story that manages to keep to reader interested.
- Use of advanced writing techniques.
- Vocabulary above average.
- A meaning can be inferred, it’s not just a sequence of events.
- Neutral:
- Unreliable narrator technique.
- Nonlinear narrative technique.
- In medias res technique.
- Bad:
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- Role-play scene with Coline is long and hard to connect with the central narrative.
- Major (-5pts)
- Multiple spelling mistakes present (hrough | of of | guided only my the meek | want us to leave us | some the facts | she the process).
- Severe (-10pts)
- True ending is extremely problematic.
- True ending is extremely problematic.
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- Good:
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『Setting』 - 20/20
Originality, ideas and worldbuilding in VN.
- Good:
- Rich detail in places, customs of the time, character’s life, technology, etc.
- Depth and diverse characters.
- Neutral:
- XIX Century combined with modern times.
- Historical fiction combined with fantasy.
- Bad:
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- N/A
- Major (-5pts)
- N/A
- Severe (-10pts)
- N/A
- N/A
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- Good:
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『Gameplay』 - 20/20
About interactivity, e.g: kinetic, with choices, or higher.
- Good:
- Original Epistolary System.
- Neutral:
- Kinetic Novel.
- Epistolary System doesn’t imply narrative branches.
- Hybrid VN style (NVL and ADV).
- Bad:
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- N/A
- Major (-5pts)
- N/A
- Severe (-10pts)
- N/A
- N/A
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- Good:
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『Programming』 - 12.5/20
Builds released, correct VN execution, bugs, crashes, etc.
- Good:
- No bugs.
- No crashes.
- Uploaded builds for most supported operative systems.
- Descriptive filenames.
- Original Epistolary System.
- Custom and complex credits screen. (There is even a Music Box!)
- Neutral:
- Plain text scripts present on the game files
- Assets were not compressed in a RPA file.
- Bad:
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- The extra button is disabled on all screens except the title screen.
- Major (-5pts)
- No android version.
- Severe (-10pts)
- N/A
- N/A
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- Good:
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『Promotion』 - 20/20
About the thumbnail, title, game page, metadata, tags, description, screenshots, etc.
- Good:
- Title: Vague but eye-catching.
- Description: Use of HTML. Informative and accurate, creates interest.
- Thumbnail: Eye-catching image.
- Metadata: Filled all important info and is updated.
- Tags: Multiple accurate tags, game is easy to find.
- Screenshots: Multiple game related images uploaded, people can judge before downloading.
- Neutral:
- Description: lack of trigger warnings.
- Thumbnail: Can be animated, would add the character sprites.
- Tags: Would add “renpy”, “VN”, and “Thriller” tag.
- Bad:
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- N/A
- Major (-5pts)
- N/A
- Severe (-10pts)
- N/A
- N/A
- Minor (-2.5pts)
- Good:
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『Personal Opinion』 - 10/10
Is fun/cute/interesting/scary/etc? Did I like it? (subjective)
You can’t imagine how much I identify with this story, that is an major perk for any writer, being able to tell stories that other people can relate with.
Walkthrough / Summary
if kinetic: you get a summary.
purpose: provide insight about what people understood from the VN.
else: how to get all the endings, along with a brief text about how I played the VN.
purpose: provide insight about how people play the VN.
This is a thriller story with horror and mystery elements, with a mind blowing plot twist at the end.
All of this takes place in a village in the Montsylvestre region, where we learn about the friendship of Mirabelle Maribond and Célias Vandère. Mirabelle is a young orphaned adult who was raised by her abusive aunt, and because of this, she was out of the house most of the time. One day, while she was in the library, she met Célia, a shy girl who lived alone. The two shared an interest in stories and soon became good friends.
I must emphasize that Célia was so lonely that she would soon become extremely dependent on Mirabelle and her favorite hobby: story nights. However, Celia was not someone to be underestimated, she is much more complex than it seems at first glance. Celia is very imaginative and intelligent, and tried to write a long and complex script for a story night: “Sylvan Adventure”… that could never be played.
Célia never forgot that script, and she would make it happen at all costs.
Years passed and the game began without warning: one night, Célia disappeared with a group of children in the forest of Montsylvestre. All of them were found alive, but under strange circumstances. The children said it was all Célia’s fault, and so, her reputation was shattered, the whole town now threatens her as an outcast, and Mirabelle was not the exception.
On top of that, Mirabelle’s aunt was pressuring her to get a job. Eventually, Mirabelle decided to radically start a new life and went to a seaside city to work as a warehouse clerk for a shipping company. No goodbyes were told.
With the help of Coline (Mirabelle’s coworker with which she becomes very close and intimate), Mirabelle quickly gets used to her new life. However, Coline would not last forever…
Months later, Mirabelle began to receive letters from Montsylvestre.
The ghosts of the past haunt her, she won’t escape so easily. The letters come from Célia, Martin (a doctor and friend of hers) and Louis (a young aristocrat from Montsylvestre). Mirabelle is widely informed about Célia’s state and progress during all this time, she now works in a manor as a servant and tutor of a young aristocrat. However, story night has only just begun.
After some weeks, Mirabelle is bothered by strange letters describing how Célia has gone completely mad; she has an unsettling appearance, neglects her duties, appears in strange places, and her diary is filled with strange drawings and horrifying descriptions of a woman in the forest that haunts her, along with frequent descriptions about a pond with an island full of bluebells and a church-high oak tree. Meanwhile, Célia was sending letters that said that everything was fine.
Mirabelle is deeply worried about this, but at the same time, she doesn’t trust anyone. She will have to go to the manor to know the truth. And so she does, only to find out that Célia has completely vanished from the manor, not even a single trace was found.
Everything about this feels wrong for Mirabelle, and she decides to stay in the manor.
A few days later, Mirabelle catch the young aristocrat spying on her, and one night she sees him going out of the manor in hurry. She follows him until they both reach a pond in the farthest parts of Montsylvestre. She corners Louis to spill the whole truth, and her suspicions were correct, it was all just a facade for Célia to disappear, Louis was helping her.
However, unexplainable and irrational things still kept happening: Louis was there to see Célia, but she didn’t came. They both go to the hideout were she would stay for weeks, but Célia never went there. Mirabelle had a strong hunch to go back to the pond again, only to find a boat full of bluebells, a sign that Célia was alive and succeed in all her plans.
Célia was ahead of everyone, no one could caught her.
Plot Analysis
on what I interpreted, learnt, and thought after playing this VN. (highly subjective)
purpose: improve story clarity and reduce risk of misinterpretation.
Note: Rastagong included his own inspirations and meanings of his VN, it’s unlocked after reading the VN. I highly recommend reading the Rastagong’s own explanation.
However, most of the VN are still free to interpret. Here’s my attempt:
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About the True Ending
After reading the ending notes about the true epilogue, I can’t help but feel that this was an extremely risky way to clarify things, because 99% of the time the reader will get it wrong.
Writer, you must understand that the plot twist in this ending is so harsh and insulting to the reader, that emotions will block any possible rational interpretation. We feel as deceived and betrayed as Mirabelle.
After reading this ending, I only had time to think about the implications of Celia being extraordinarily intelligent and psychopathic through the eight-month curse, from putting many children at risk, to being able to predict that Martin will recommend her at the manor so that she could meet Louis, and finally, get ahead of everyone and successfully escape on that last night.
It’s so absurd, that I truly hope that all of this is justified with huge improvisation skills. -
Célia’s Disappearance Plan
I assume that everything that Célia said in the letters to Mirabelle, what she said to Louis, and wrote in the diary is fake (or at least partially fake).
But let’s try to ignore for a moment the true ending, and interpret what Celia tried to make everyone think of her.
In my opinion, Celia intended her disappearance to look like some kind of suicide, because she really tried to make it clear that she was very hurt by everything everyone had done to her.
I see strong allegories about depression and suicide, for example: in the fake diary Celia exaggerated all her feelings and what others thought of her, meanwhile, when all the people saw her very sick, she dismissed it with “it’s just a cold”, a common behavior in depressed people (pretending that everything is fine). Constant late-night walks in the woods are escapism, along with being secluded in her room, are also very common behaviors among depressed people.
Finally, when Louis played along, she told Mirabelle in one of her letters that he was a fool for being a “enabler,” because he was making Celia’s “depression” worse instead of helping her get out of the comfort zone that was hurting her so much. -
Célia’s Sylvan Adventure Script
We know that the pond with the island is fictitious, therefore, it is the only part of this VN in which an effort is needed to understand the symbolism behind this literary construction.
My interpretation here strongly complements the suicidal theory: The color of the bluebells is blue (duh), it is a color that conveys sadness according to color theory. It’s clear that the fog resembles confusion and fear, while the constant winds that stir everything up are Celia’s strong emotions dominating her. The island with many flowers andt the Oak Tree signify paradise, the afterlife. This theory is further confirmed by the fact that, in most European mythologies, the oak tree is seen as sacred. The woman in the forest who grants wishes is death, death makes everything disappear, and Celia thinks about death constantly, until it becomes too oppressive to bear; That she is underwater is a metaphor for this weight of being so useless, with the constant thoughts about suicide. The boat that goes from the creek to the island is clearly an allegory about Kharon, the boatman of the Hades (Greek mythology).
Comments
Anything goes.
Sylvian Dissaparence got a lower score than A Darkening Flood. However, this VN is by all means, superior to your previous work. Remember that the review is only meant to help you fix the issues.
Consider that this VN was dozens of times bigger, more ambitious, and a lot of new things were tried; therefore, the risk of issues growth. Things still need to be polished.
More work than mine needs to be done too.
I understand that the true ending was added in the later stages of development, when almost everything was finished. Therefore, it’s imperative to reread the entire story with this ending in mind, looking for inconsistencies that do not support this ending.
Overall, it’s a great VN and I would definitely recommend it.
Hope this helps! ❤️