I just created an account purely just to say how much I enjoyed this. It was a quick read that I was able to view in the browser on my phone without issue. I got a couple of laughs from the humor, the art was cute, and the character dynamic and relationship was both interesting and endearing while being somewhat morally grey, all without being something that I predicted from early on.
I don’t have much of any experience with visual novels, and I don’t even know what it means for one to be described as “kinetic”. I do, however, have a massive amount of experience in reading light novels, manga, books, doujinshi, reflective essays, personal accounts, psychological and emotional reports on the state of social affairs for wlw and the greater lgbtq community on a global scale-
Anyways, point is, I love yuri, and I very much enjoyed this work. On one hand, I’d love to see more of these characters. On the other, the story certainly does not need more. It’s a perfectly succinct and self-contained work that does a good job of properly covering all of the ground it needs to for a product of such length. It has just the right amount of depth for what it is, and was generally well written.
The pacing did have something of a sudden lurch, and the shift in both time and perspective was slightly jarring, I suspect partially due to the slight change in format, and lack of corresponding art. However, it was nothing severe enough to have any meaningfully negative impact on the reading experience. Also, I only even consciously noticed one or two minor spelling/grammatical issues, which is exponentially better than most self-published free media.
Since this is effectively little more than a stream of consciousness written out on my phone at 3am, I am not going to bother proofreading this comment. None the less, many thanks to those who made this! I enjoyed the time I spent with it.
TL;DR: this was a fun, funny, and interesting story with some cute art, and cute characters. There is the potential for more to be explored without leaving the impression that the work is incomplete or lacking. I was able to view the entire work in the browser on my iPhone without a single issue.
The length is short, the quality is decently good, and it’s exceedingly accessible. I’d recommend this to much anyone who enjoys short form yuri content.