Thanks for your feedback and positivity! I am trying to get into writing at the moment, and this is my first piece in this setting. My other few have been a few children's poems.
Yes - I struggled to make the unlikely allies theme the forefront. TBH my version of unlikely allies is quite nuanced at best lol
The idea was that Donoghue and his "mate" Zahir were secondary versions of unlikely allies, and the main one being Donoghue trying to help Fenton. It was not a strong enough job by me, especially compared to the other stories i've read where its often right in your face! But I suppose I need to learn to hit the brief properly instead of write my own version :)