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This was an exceptionally delightful read!! All of the characters are incredibly charming, and I definitely appreciate their tight-knit dynamic. I'm head over heels for Ajmal, seriously. And Felice isn't the sort of RO I gravitate towards, but you did an incredible job with planting intrigue and allowing for different dynamics between them and MC. It's the first time I'm truly looking forward to seeing how the relationship between the MC and an RO develops, without actually intending to pursue them romantically.

As someone who's picky about MC personality and choices, I'm very much satisfied with the reactions/dialogue you supply us with. I deeply appreciate the ability to say one thing while thinking another, and other personality nuances like that; not all IFs allow for the MC to feel like a tangible character and participant of the story, but yours is one that allows me to be properly immersed.

The only instance regarding dialogue options that stood out was when we were presented with the choice to either confess to Ajmal or leave. Given that every other possible romantic interaction is presented with a relatively straightforward either/or with regular choices and then romantic versions of those choices, it feels off when my character isn't forward enough to initiate but is undeniably smitten with Ajmal, so I am cornered into the "non-romantic" choice. I believe a combination of the two would work well, where MC wishes to say something but can't bring themselves to.

Given your recent update to save files, I'll mention that the formatting was confusing to me and I only figured out how it works by accident. If there's a way for you to more clearly distinguish the save/load slots with the save/load files, organizing them visually into 2 columns instead of 9 rows, I think that could help some future confusion from others as well.

All in all, amazing read. Your prose is elegant, and I'm so fond of your characters. I'm really, really looking forward to future uploads!

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Hello! I’m very flattered by all your nice compliments! It really means a lot. :)

I’ll look into how to make the save to file and load from file thing clearer.

As for the choice you speak of, it only appears if you already showed romantic interest in Ajmal. The choice to not confess does not cancel that in any way and the game will still take into account the romantic feelings MC has for Ajmal. 

There’s not really a choice to opt out of the romance in this choice set because it wouldn’t make much sense that soon after expressing interest.

But that might not be clear enough that the choice is still within the romance, so I’ll give it another look.