Where do I begin!? This is by far the best visual novel I've read. Usually, the content of the story has me intrigued, but Straight!? had me emotionally invested. I simply wanted more to the story, which I loved. I finished reading the original version, and I haven't been able to stop thinking about it. The author(s) has/have done an amazing job.
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The only thing I wish was different is the epilogue. I wish it was part of the final chapter, and a new epilogue was written to focus more on what happened during the summer; their return to school, how did the changes to the swim team go, did they stay in touch with Ash, do they all still hang out (would love them to see Ash several times), and for heavens sake do they finally get lube! [you know which scene I'm talking about ;)]. Just food for thought as you revamp. I honestly haven't found a story that I was more consumed by than this. The authors deserve all the praise they get.