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A really cute game overall. The romance of hagan's route did feel quite dull by the end, that's just my honest opinion. I mean it's expected for a romance story to be kind of dull if there isn't any passionate scenes. But in this specific route of the game, I feel the romance by the end became extremely one sided up until credits. I feel the love confession part should have been done during the time they are trapped in barrier. That could have made for a much better development. But since the romance only really became a thing by the end, everything else after felt rushed, annoying and forced. I didn't try the other routes yet, because I kind of lost interest for the moment after this first route but even though I felt like this about the romance.. the story overall is really good. The art is great too. I like this fantasy style. So don't take my opinion as me saying the game is bad, I'm just being honest about the one aspect I didn't like. I of course play other routes at later time, good job and thank you for making this! Don't stop making because this style is very good and hard to find other's like it. I just give this critique so you can have understanding the things that may need improvement for future stuff.

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Thank you for your feedback :D Romance writing is not my strong point but I'll try my best to improve it in my next product ^^

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Thank you for taking the feedback well~ like I said that was the ONLY aspect I didn't like. Literally you did an amazing job on all the character's personalities. So to anyone else reading this, I HIGHLY suggest to buy the game, you will very much enjoy it regardless if the romance is strong or not. I just care a lot about the romance aspects, but like I said I will finish the game later. I only didn't finish right now because I was looking for something more romantic to read these days. This protagonist/main character was probably the only character of all the many games I played that I liked so much. You didn't make him too hard headed, not too weak, and not annoying etc... You made him a perfectly well balanced character that you want to cheer for. The other characters also perfectly meshed with him too. Also the story was really good fantasy style. I can see your strong point is definitely world building and creating likeable personalities. Trust me, I am a very harsh critique because played and bought many yaoi games or comics. So believe my words when I say you did amazing on those things, which at the end of the day is the most important anyway. I have some more I want to say, but I will put the rest I want to say in a cut off half of this reply, so won't distract from my main point on this game.


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(this part are just recommendations, but I put this here also so other's that may be looking for some nice bl comics can see these too *most if not all can be read for free*)

As for improving romance writing I highly suggest you read these comics that I read multiple times because the romance was written so well. Some of them are serious, but some are more like romance comedies: 

"Yatteraneeze!" (this is a classical japanese bl manga that really focuses on realism on homosexual relations between young men in the 80's or 90's), "Castle Swimmer" (an extreme fantasy undersea comic on webtoons that is extremely well written in showing what modern day romance's and feelings may look like), "My Scheming Prince" (a Chinese bl manhua that you can read free on youtube, its based on a wushu jianghu fantasy the does a good job in portraying a strong friendship blooming into passionate romance), "Heesu in Class 2" (a high school korean bl on Lezhin that does a good job of portraying how in high school it's easy to overthink and miss the person who cares for you right in front of you). Lastly I will mention a more passionate/sexual romance comic called "Wolves Behind Bars" (it's korean omegaverse comic, so the genre may not be to a lot of people's taste, however it does a fantasic job at showing how a strong connection can easily develop into a uncontrollable passionate love between two lonely individuals)


These are all comics that I read multiple times from start to finish because the romance was just so attractive and well written. I suggest for you to read any of these depending on your preferred style of romance, because I strongly believe these can truly help you with your romance writings. I think "My Scheming Prince" may be something you may prefer more.

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Woah thank you so much for detailed comment! I will definitely read the stories you recommended for reference when I have time! Nice day!