wait but this is really good actually
like this feels like it could have been written as the comic was going on, there's no focus on the overarching context of everything or trying to immediately throw the characters in crazy what if situations while at the same time ignoring that sburb not happening doesn't mean all the things placed in advance weren't there, and the character traits that actually make the characters enjoyable are actually in full view
[SPOILERS FOR PQ AND THIS REWRITE]
like rose's route in PQ just only cares about having rose be really rude or just a major focus on how rose's mother's vices and how she feels about them (basically the entire route might as well be some crumby act 6 character development scene) and then it being a happy ending of friendship, no focus on having rose's personality come out just box ticking for good and bad ending
but here it just feels exactly what i would have imagined a light-hearted sburbless VN to be, you have a fun in-character investigation with either a confrontation that was a long time coming, or just a talk with hopes that with the stakes gone, that the barriers between them might get broken down, and instead of just a sour alternate path where rose acts condescending, it's a very fun exploration of her character by diving into the silly self insert fanfiction and ends up just bringing out a typically unseen joyous side of the character
i was a little disappointed that the text box was not an invitation to name rose "Silly Fendlesnatch" though like a toontown character