Hey, just gave it a short playthrough. Here's some feedback. The writing is great, and I'm not gonna talk about assets because as a fellow game designer, I know how it is lol. The only thing I can say that needs fixing is the transitions. You use 'with fade' when characters change expressions, but it would look a lot more clean if you used 'with dissolve' for expression changes or no transition at all. Fade is best used when bringing a character into a scene or taking them out.
Keep up the good work, and if you don't mind, check out my profile and give me some feedback on the demo for my game I'm working on. It's download only on pc btw.