Your attention to detail is amazing! A wonderful perfectionist.
Moving on, if you want to flesh out an area later, I found the patrol woman near Shady in the bar hot. We get favor with her turning in slaves once, and I wish there was some way to get any further with her. Perhaps more turning in of slaves, more persistent buying of drinks, as some ideas. A gradual seduction of the official. Something more than a BJ in the backroom. Perhaps have her reward the MC with sex in the alley outside? That's got an enticing erotic corruption angle: the upstanding public official giving sexual reward favors out in the alley. Repeatable when the MC turns over more recovered slaves?
I know your plate is full. Just tossing an idea out there. Cheers mate!