For the story, I did consider writing a deeper plot for the magical part, but I realized it would be better to test the idea first with a small project. I'm glad I did. It's clear now the lack of writing skill is noticeable enough for players to mention it. So that's probably where I'm going to focus my learning for a while. I'm glad you like the art style though. I honestly didn't expect to get a high rating in any category, but the aesthetic is very well-received.
It was fun.
Thank you for the review and for hosting the game jam.