I got a dog with my bf and named him Jerry. I raised this dog with my before we were in a terrible accident and my partner died. Jerry escaped and the world was infested with zombies. I never found Jerry, but I went to the woods and found a weird man named Jerry and things went bad. Very bad. But also funny. Very funny.
No major issues though there were a number of spelling and punctuation issues throughout. Please make sure to have someone else go through your work with the specific goal of weeding this stuff out.
It was really enjoyable. I appreciated the way it was written and the also the humor was very effective. I'm still trying to resolve what feels like a first half (me and bf) and the second half (me and jerry + zombies). I suspected that I was being set up to meet Quinn again but then felt disappointed that I didn't. Some of the endings were really abrupt, right from the beginning, which didn't always feel satisfying (mostly because I was enjoying the writing and humor so much).
There were many memorable moments but my favorite was probably this passage which went something like:
The moon looks so pretty tonight
Drive
Quinn is humming quietly
Drive
I'm so tired
Drive
I thought the delivery and pacing of that section was really wonderful. Good work!