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I understand that point of view. Not many developers would release a game intended to be taken seriously on April 1st. And to be honest, not only the writing is good, I enjoyed even well… after expecting something more… “serious”. Nothing wrong with a joke on the day it was released, as of now, I still feel a bit taken a back, but willing to have another reading session to finish it.

Feeling cheated is rather personal. But still understandable since the VN took itself seriously on the start. I didn’t point it out because that was a wrong way to change the perspective to the reader. More like the change was rather too abrupt to let it settle. The changes of perspective and the way it changes really brings something, even if it was intended as a comedy.

What I’m trying to say, is that… Even if it was unexpected, it shows how some authors/writers have trouble writing. (that might not be a point, but it seemed like that.) I myself have done some writing and there are times I feel like joking with other characters. But Immersion was broken rather quickly. I guess that’s what made me stop reading.

Like I said, I took it personally and probably overreacted to it. Other than that, I’m still thinking of trying again, and this time go with an open mind rather than what I was expecting. It might be different from person to person. But I can’t lie that there is potential here, I did laugh, so it did what it was supposed to do.

In short: the fault falls in both of us. As a reader, I expected something that wasn’t intended. And I think, as a writer, there wasn’t anything explicit saying that this was not something to be taken seriously. Because of that missing information, it leads to some readers to feel cheated. I don’t blame you, Boroco. You wanted to create something with your team or alone (I’m not sure). It was an oversight, everyone can make a mistake, and honestly I would say is a mistake that you can learn from.

(I feel like I’m rambling…) I’d say that take this and the criticism of others in a constructive way to become better and learn from it. That is the best course of action that you can take. Maybe my words might fly over, since I notice how much I have been writing. But, I don’t think this should be taken in a way to hurt you, it was an honest opinion. I for sure will give it another try. (And sorry if have been rambling since the beginning.)