This is a really hot story, so long that there's plenty to enjoy even if certain aspects don't float your boat. Lots of great detail and the gradual intensifying of the plot is exquisite.
That said, I have noted that the author doesn't welcome corrections, but it really does still need another proof-read by a mother-tongue speaker, as there are incorrect choices of variants of the past tense all over the place, which just don't quite make sense in their current form, and some repeated incorrect vocab that won't have been picked up by a spellchecker since the words are still real words (but they mean something else).
Very happy to offer my services proofreading both this and the hotly-awaited sequel!