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This is a great!

Just want to report a couple of inconsistency in text :)
1. Page 9 - Who are you section - Supply (p.XX) should be be Supply (p.17)

2. Page 9 - Juice Section - Burden (p.XX) should be Burden (p.10)

3. Page 77 - Job Table - Action Result 1-2 and 3-4 should be different?

4. Page 11-16 - In the starting item text, there are variations of +1A, +1 Armour, 1 Armour. I guess they all mean the same thing?

Also a suggestion if I may, is it possible to remove the use of profanity in the text or maybe add some variety? Somehow they feel out of place eventhough this is a punk RPG. On the other hand, maybe they are just not integrated well enough throughout the text (there are 4 F and 2 Shxt words in 74 pages. Somehow I wish there are either more creative uses of them or just none of them...)

Many thanks for taking the time with the game! The text here is still very much a WIP, so I’ll resolve all those issues before release. I agree about the profanities. They were there at the genesis of the project but now seem largely redundant. I’ll settle on a “voice” throughout. Thanks again.