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 skjold is my instant fav.

The exposition dumps are huge, and don't often feel organic. 
at the start, the MC instantly monologues their backstory on the way to the portal. once there, they name drop some friends' names for a bit while starting at the portal which is suppose to have urgency yet continues to reference them. these friends we haven't yet met prior at all to build off of either. I feel like a proper prologue is needed leading up to the portal going haywire.  Show the MC at the university with these friends stated earlier for a better set up.

Skjold, I like his mellow and respectful vibe but, he's a walking, talking lore double wide extra thick lore book. every other sentence is spoon feeding various info of the town, rival nations, some laws at the MC right away to someone he just met ever so casually. Explaining something is one thing from a naive question MC has being a fish out of water but dropping a near whole history lesson is another when on their way to his cell. I know he was getting a read for the MC reaction to it but it sure was a lot all at once. I love lore and history dumps, yet gradually over time via environment and yes dialogue, that warrant's a mention for the current situation. 

That wasn't a history lesson, that was an interrogation disguised as a conversation. 

Skjold was using his eyes, ears, and maybe even his nose as a lie-detector.

He was evaluating the MC's reactions to each and every single thing that was said. What is agreed with? What is disagreed with? How does the MC feel about this, that, and the other?

That is a skill which fully justifies putting someone in a leadership role, and he's apparently good enough at it to have been raised up the ranks relatively quickly. 

Now, I'm NOT saying that his friendliness was or wasn't genuine. That is something we will need to wait till farther into the story to find out.  I'm saying that Skjold was multi-tasking. Very good way to justify a lore dump, and it made the motive for it's delivery especially interesting. 

My following statement tells you i know this "I know he was getting a read for the MC reaction" But my point is, drowning them in lore etc right away is too much starting out. It feels better spreading out this kind of info gradually over time, not all up front right away.