The setting is very interesting! Cyberpunk themes takes the biggest part, then dystopian idols, then magical girls.
I really felt in my choices that I’m doing some compromises but ultimately I just end up trying to survive.
I couldn’t experience a lot of changes based on my choices, but I assume the loyalty will affect story later when further chapters are released!
The magical girl aspect doesn’t strike out as much possibly because “artificial” ones are very different from what they usually look like, or because of the cyberpunk blend? I think that visuals could be blending the two aspects more. But I’m not sure what it would give (crossing a certain threshold, the Magical Shield bodyguard design would not look serious enough). There are several ways to interpret “doll eyes” so I’m not sure if the sprites show exactly what’s described in the narration, almond eyes with strong edges and eye-lashes, or if they are supposed to be rounder like the idols (but I suppose not, to make the distinction?). That said I like the individual designs, taken independently of this.
The female idol’s character art stands out too much compared to the other ones, but it’s also part of her “modifications” and due to the fact she’s wearing very different clothes, so I’m not sure what could be done about it. In the Gunnm movie, Gally/Alita has bigger eyes but it didn’t strike me that much in the end. Maybe it’s just that she appears for the first time out of nowhere in the neon city, but she has no cyberpunk elements on her? (but the male idol too, however I find him to blend better; smart clothes are probably just better at this).
Was AI used more for characters or backgrounds? (I see backgrounds have some gibberish so that could be it, while characters have precise details mentioned in narration, so more likely hand-drawn; but since the description says AI results were heavily edited anyway, it’s hard to tell)
UI issue: when the scrolling bar appears, it overlaps the text (surprised Ren’Py doesn’t fix that on its own)
Typo: “Stelar Tears” -> “Stellar Tears” Grammar: “the only 10 years old young idol” -> “the only 10-year-old young idol” (I’m also not sure about “only” if it means it’s the only idol that is so young, or if she has only 10 years; and “young” sounds redundant)
Audio: it’s nice! But maybe the opening theme is too much on the magical side, not even on the Cyberpunk/darker side? It also depends on how the story unfolds, but it quite surprised me compared to the visuals.
Also, I don’t read Spanish but it’s nice you had it too! I don’t even publish my own games in French, but it would help me as I often think about fancy expressions in French first, then need some time finding a good equivalent in English, but not as fun.