Hello!
Thank you for your comment! Sorry to reply so late.
I think you are being a bit harsh with yourself about the graphics, I like the style. Then again, I am not a graphic artist either. X)
I tend to whine a lot, so it could be that they are OK. It’s just that i want to do a lot better, and i am very frustrated that i can not, so i vented a little here.
Wow, Bacon is a bit crude ("f*ck" and so on) (sorry for the egregious involuntary pun! XD)! (How surprising is it that a vegetarian would criticise Bacon rather than Grapes?) I think the writing in Detective Horse managed to be super funny while staying polite, which is closer to my taste. It may depend on the personality of the character, after all, but some ‘visual bipping’ (eg "f*ck") could still work. ;)
When i wrote that line i actually stopped and thought that people might have the exact issue that you are raising here, but then i convinced myself that if there is not an excess of swear words it would possibly be OK. Apparently, it is not, and thank you for telling me so, because i might unnecessarily alienate players with it.
I do not like these “visual bipping” things; either you do or you do not, and adding these symbols and such is like saying “i want to, but i am too afraid” or something on that line.
Next time i will try to follow more the innuendo route that i took for Detective Horse, which is funnier to write anyway.
‘Ceci n’est pas un T-800.’ -> Do you speak French by any chance? I am French. :) (But dislike ‘contemporary art’. XD)
I live next to France and, at the time, it was common for school children to learn French as second language, so i have some notion of it, but by no stretch stretch of the imagination i would say that i “speak French”. Read it slowly and maybe write it a bit, but that’s all.
Music may be a bit loud sometimes? Some option to adjust it would be nice. (I understand this was certainly not a priority in the course of the game jam. X)
No, it was not a priority, but i will take it into consideration for next time.
* ‘quelle belle raisin’ -> rather ‘quel beau raisin’ since raisin is masculine, although I guess you could argue that the gender agrees to Lily Grapes’s sex as female through syllepsis.
It is the same in my mother tongue (un raïm, masculine), but i had to choose to break the rules somewhere, either by using a masculine sentence to refer a female character or to “change raisin’s gender”, as it were. I chose the latter.
If someone else complains, i will argue that the French in a world where fruits and pigs talk and travel through time is a bit different than the one in our world 😉.
* ‘Mon Dieux!’ -> ‘Mon Dieu !’, since this is singular.
Fixed. Thank you!
Also, note than in France’s French typography, there is a space before double-component punctuation marks (this is not true for all varieties of French, especially in Quebec French).
Although i knew it, i did not have it in mind while writing these sentences. And i am a bit on the fence in this, because it would be the only sentence in an English work using French typography, which it would be correct, but i fear it would seem more an error than anything else.
I think the even more correct way would be to put these words in italics, to show that are “foreign words”, and keep the English typography, something i wish i could have done in the sentence that Pomme says “Le pain!”, because i am mixing both languages here, but, unfortunately, the font i am using does not have an italic version.
That ‘earth apple’ pun is nice (pomme de terre), but I am wondering how much of the non-native-French-speaking audience can get it, since I am biased in knowledge. ;)
You got me there! Since i am used that everyone around me knows that this is how the French people say potato, i assumed it was more common knowledge that it may be.
To be honest, i was a more worried that people would have more trouble with the raisin / raisin misunderstanding between Pomme and Grapes than the ”earth apple” thing.
Thank you a lot for you comments, and for playing my very short game (again)!