This story is actually really well translated into a game. The general art style of the game really fits the story. I love the fact that you actually got your dad to narrate the game, it ads such a personal touch to it. The little interactive segments in between the dialogue add some fun gameplay to it.
For the narration though, I would actually do it in way smaller blocks of text instead of really big blocks (since I don't know the language and I couldn't really follow the narration). I understand it's a game jam though so what you did was a perfectly viable option.
Good game. Well done!
By the way, the title is great too. One of the first games I clicked on just because of the title. It really captured my attention.