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the MC hates his father for no reason

(is this a misandrist novel?)
the clock in the bedroom is wrong, both times
the characters have Japanese names but are voiced by English people
Yoko doesn't care that you knocked her over
MC doesn't know it's Yoko until she stands up, so instead of a "Yoko" tag we get "???" when we knock her over.
MC calls her "dear friend" but then says it's been ages.
"I can't believe it's honestly you." - when is the last time you heard someone honestly speak like this?
Yoko's words are delivered "softly-spoken" yet she uses exlamation points.
The school building is one of the oldest in the area, yet it looks futuristic.
What makes MC hilarious to Yuika, considering he only walked into the classroom?
The classroom music sounds like a cabaret, which isn't a good thing
When introducing yourself to the class, the choices seem like jokes. Then MC replies in a normal tone. WTF?
Yuika is more annoying than seductive
"Two newly familiar faces" - yet MC doesn't know one of them, so how is it familiar?
Yuika's leg has an extra joint above the knee
Katsuki mentions the phrase "safe space." Yup, this is a misandrist novel.
Yuika and Katsuki assume MC is judging Haru for being concerned about the way she ate lunch. This is also misandrist
Arakawa-sensei seems to be Japanese, yet has western stubble. Maybe he's half Japanese? It seems to be a design flaw.
The MC is male, yet cannot understand basic words in class. He reacts emotionally by chewing his pen. This is not realistic.
The teacher gets onto MC for shouting, yet doesn't mind a full-blown conversation from him immediately afterward.
"more simpler"

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First off, Thanks for playing! Some of these we agree with, others not so much, thanks for the input!

MC has reasons that arn't discussed in the demo, part of the mystery of the game.
Clock Will be fixed 
Our Novel takes place in Japan, voiced In English as we're native English speakers (with that said we will make sure the grammer of names is correct if funded)
Yoko rarely gets mad unless it involves people being mean to others, not herself.
We used ??? to indicate you not knowing their name
MC has moved away and hasn't seen yoko in a couple years. (explained in the back story - they moved to a new school halfway through the school year.)
Schools old however, it has been converted. you learn this later on. It's one of the most expensive schools to go to, back story with MC's Father.
MC is hilarious because he was just standing up while everyone is sitting / following yoko to her desk.. Yuika is teasing him.
That music is used only when yuika is teasing you.
To each their own on Yuika.
They're familiar because they're in his class, he just never met them yet.. only noticed them.
Katsuki has reason for this - wont go into it tho. (spoilers)
I don't think Yuika is judging him... only Katsuki for reasons above^
Arakawa's sprite is being re-worked
Being male makes you automatically smart? - not sure I understand.. Anyway he doesn't understand because he's a Japanese student learning English grammar.

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Thank you for taking my criticism seriously. I think I was a bit too harsh on some things.

Your answers make a lot of sense so thank you for responding. I am still a little bit concerned with some anti-male parts, but I think you have a good reason for including them, so I'll let those slide.

I think I didn't understand or remember that he was confused because he was learning English. Maybe it is more clear than I remember. The main gripe I had was, he reacts very emotionally / neurotically which is very atypical in general, for a male. Not to say that it's impossible for a male to be this way, just that it might be 2% of the male population who would be this neurotic.

I'm looking forward to playing the full game!