Honestly? Much better than I was expecting. The early stuff only had minor model clipping, particularly with clothing like skirts, but you seem to have addressed that later on. And there were actually very few text errors through it. The biggest one being the Judie and Iris sleep over where it says Iris' name instead of Judie's when it's pretty obvious it was a Judie line lol.
I can also safely say I now see why a lot of comments say this could very easily be a show series. Each major act could be it's own season with just how much you packed in there! And then you could even have a pseudo spin off season for the alt endings. Honestly, I went into this with relatively high hopes from the comments. Now I plan to go into Eternum with great expectations lmao. Especially with how you seem to have gotten better through this one. Can't wait to see how great that will be in comparison!
Also, saw a comment saying there could be tie ins with the 2 being in the same world and what not. I honestly have some hopes for at least a few references, if not outright cross over content :)
P.S. what ever happened to the people Tom took out for his best friend? The dude he choked out and dragged in the bushes outright slayed me with how it made me laugh lmao