The texboxes are too big (it cover too much of the screen) and the font is too small.
And all the text that we see in the begenning should be put into at least twice as much textboxes - each with a smaller dose of text.
sprites are nice but the background and GUI style are bad. And no CGs :(
The girls seem to be interesting but the story is too simple and too short. Seriously, I played much longer demo versions.