Right away can say that having moments leading up to the initial meeting would be great to add. Elaboration will be needed, it feel like you are getting jerked around and forced into things like its a fact, rather than a question, no easing into it. Dog and Horse have tail? Where? We cannot name the MC, so therefore who is the MC? Species? Gender? Looks/Image of? First Character choice, it happens out of the blue, sort of, no MC thoughts on the options, plus going to the bathroom for no reason is NOT an option, too strange. Choice points should have more weight by providing detail before making them. At Diner sprites are too close together and overlapping, can't clearly see their expressions. And that is enough for now, you will need to revise things at a later time. Forcing choices to correlate directly to the characters make it feel too dull and devoid of choice. Need to add in originality!