First of all, please allow me to congratulate you on a great story, well written, and the perfect level of pacing and teasing, which actually leads to something, a reward. Very nice product!
Now, I do have a few questions, and they might simply be signs of me not being compatible with these times, but why are almost all MCs and significant male characters ("captain" Daelus who's more concerned about the fabric he bought for his uniform than the feelings of a gorgeous girl) always fucking whiny beta soyboys nowadays? I don't know if it's really turning all the metrosexual emasculated betacucks on, or what's going on here? Everything is ME ME ME, all about him getting relief, his needs, and his day being ruined because he had to sleep 3 hours less one day. A real man is the exact opposite of this MC - Tough to the world and himself, and knows when to be sensitive and soft towards the girl. Any pussy can be "cool" or "tough" towards a little girl.
Also, I was sad to see yet another example of a great story getting ruined with this idea that handcuffs and femdom/failed male domination (by a pussy, that is) is "romantic" or a nice thing to initiate a girl into the world of sex and pleasure with. Also, the statement "I've got my cock inside you, you're woman, time for romance is over" is a sick statement that made me seriously consider whether I wanted to finish the story or not. I do understand the blindfold was different, not used as a bondage/slavery tool here, due to his reservations - that's fine.
I wonder if there are some young people who are new to sex and adulthood reading this, who are actually learning stuff from this and therefore ruining a lifetime of sex. Cuffs, bondage, and dom should be something you adopt later on, when you are comfortable with sex, a very high level of trust, and need that something extra - it can ruin a young girl for life, if used early on, and ESPECIALLY when taking someone's virginity.
Finally, who the fuck in their right mind would force a girl to start talking about things that she struggled with, depression, and so on, as a teaser for her first ever sexual intercourse? This whole scene should've been replaced with setting the mood with licking/sucking her nipples, cunnilingus, and showing her pleasure, easing her into what's about to happen - not your selfish curiosity about her depression and history! (Mind you, the MC didn't know what the story was, when he asked)
Now, I did introduce this comment with praise, and that still stands, it was well written, clearly a quality VN, with a lot of work put into it (not much thought though). That I disagree with the writer's f'ed up ideas about romance, pleasure, use of bondage/cuffs/etc is a matter of understanding the world today, and does not take away from the quality of this work.