Wow thanks a lot for such a priceless feedback!
You are 100 percent right in most of the examples given.
As far as the order in which the information is presented and the way it is presented, you are absolutely right, these thoughts have been bothering me all along and I was really worried that the main feature of the setting was being presented very slowly.
About the different styles of art. This project has been in progress for a while now, and I've been using it to try my skills as an artist as well. If we were looking at it as a commercial product, then of course a single style would be necessary. But for me it is also a kind of presentation of a variety of skills. So I agree with you, but as long as the project is in this state, I won't redo all the art. Maybe it would make sense if I wanted to submit not just the setting, but a specific art direction as well.
ll your other recommendations are very helpful and I will definitely follow them in the future. Thank you very much for your attention!