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Not too bad! It's got potential! I am eager to see where the unfinished routes wind up going~

There are a few typos here and there, but nothing too distracting. The current routes are nice! Though going through a route only to find it unfinished is a little bothersome. Perhaps when you're about to make a choice that leads to an unfinished route, there could be a note saying that? That way we don't start to find a route and end up at a dead end? Just a thought. 

All in all, I like the game so far.

Main thing I'd suggest right now is an easy fix. Just changing  a word, basically: During the Pantyhose route, when the girl's day and boy's day at the shop is about to start, the main character wonders if the mistress is talking about "transvestites". This is an outdated term that many trans people, especially trans women, aren't really comfortable with, in my experience. I'd say in this case, saying "trans women"/"transgender women" or "trans people"/"transgender people" might be better? 

Or, if you wanna get dirty about it, might I suggest "chicks with dicks"? :P That might fit in better considering how your story is worded, haha.

This isn't me calling you out or anything! I've got no ill will or bad faith for you. I realize that people don't just magically know this stuff unless someone tells them! So I figured I'd just let you know and offer you some alternative words!

.....Speaking of trans people, I hope that's planned in the story haha. Some non-transitioned trans girls with large dicks for our protagonist to suck off~ That'd be hot~ 

A nonbinary character would be neat at some point too. 

Overall though my main gripe with the story is how the protagonist seems to faint every time she orgasms. It was interesting the first time, but it gets really trope-y and a bit weird when it's in multiple routes. How many real life girls straight up faint after orgasming? Is that a common thing that I just haven't heard of? Or is that simply a kink in itself or something? I mean this as constructive criticism, not hate. To me, it seems like this fainting may be a quick shortcut/excuse to timeskip. I'd maybe try to think of other ways to gloss over the passage of time? 

That's just my personal opinion though. Some people might be super into that? Idk. It's just my thoughts.

As for what I'd like to see some of in the future: (non-lethal) heavy choking/breath play/asphixiation; some multiple orgasm torture (making her cum over and over til it hurts); and maybe some chastity belt with tease and denial until she's super desperate~

.........One of these days I really should make a second itch account for nsfw stuff instead of being horny on main like this lmao

Thanks a lot for this detailed feedback, Katey! I'm glad the game was worth writing it.

First of all, those faints - yeah, I should rethink this tool of making breaks in the story... and check-up the heroine's health!

That’s a good idea about marking unfinished routes… or, for current version, it’d be easier to mark the finished ones :) I think I’ll implement it in the future updates.

What about trans people, I’m not sure I understand you right. This passage wasn’t about transitioning, but about men who love to put on women’s clothes sometimes. I thought “transvestite” was the right word for it. But I could be wrong.

And adding the real trans people into the game is a good idea, they’ll definitely appear here!

Breath play, multiple orgasm torture and chastity belts… yep, they are in the game’s kinks list and will be added!

Thanks again for your feedback, especially considering it's goes your main itch account :)

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Lmao you're welcome! 

Ah, so you were going for "men who like wearing woman's clothes sometimes". I see! Let's see... In that case, maybe the term "crossdressers" or "drag queens" would be more along the lines of what you are looking for 😊!

Glad to help. And ooo, I am very much excited to see those kinks eventually then! Thanks for responding.

My favorite kink overall is always bondage~

And dw, I'm the only one who ever really uses my itch account haha. It's enough effort already keeping up with 2 discord accounts lol. But mainly, I buy a lot of those massive itchio bundles that happen once or twice a year, and I just don't wanna have to buy them twice just to hide a few NSFW games onto a separate itch account. So, 🤷 I just bite the bullet and get horny on main here lmao


Always happy to see a creator who replies to feedback! Makes me all the more eager to keep track of the development of this.


What program are you writing this in? I should try writing a few stories myself with it!

Thanks, I think "crossdressers" will do!

Yep, in "Willingly", bondage is the king of all kinks :)

The soft I'm using is Twine, it's simple and very useful. If you need advice on it, you can contact me!

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Great! And yeah, if I ever mess with Twine, I'll keep you in mind if I have any questions! Thank you!

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The new 0.13 version has multiple orgasm torture kink... and it was you who inspired me to add it! Check it out, I'll be glad to receive your feedback!

The new update introduces chastity belts ;)

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 :o ooooo I'll update then hehe