The story is really appealing!
The only issue I see here (not exactly an issue) is the background seems a little bit distracting. And for me, because of the font and the word style never change, the reading seems too much. (The story is really great.) Maybe highlight some more key information.
And I like your graphic. Just hoping to see more.
The best part for me is where you point out important choices. And in the end you give the players an option to go back to the key scene.