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As an experiment I replaced in script.rpy

, he he.

with

.

(over 400 hits as of v11! and some 100 more with variants like ", ha ha.")

I think the text gets better with the change, it is used every handful of lines and makes it, for me, less fun to read the story.

Sorry if this comment is grumpy, but I honestly believe the removal improves the quality. I very much enjoy your game and like what you are doing, the above is meant as friendly feedback.

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Oh yes, I hope the Dev doesn't take it personal, but I think this is a problem too. It kinda breaks the line of thinking I guess. This is the only thing I would change in the game, everything else is lovely.

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Yeah, it's kind of like when you're talking to someone and they say "Um" or "y'know" every other sentence.  Especially in the script of the characters' thoughts, they should be eliminated.  Someone might say "Hee hee" or chuckle as a verbal tick, but no one actually thinks it.