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Game Title/URL:  The Paper Boat

https://mrsaturn666.itch.io/the-paper-boat

Pitch/Information: The paper boat is a game where you follow a track to find a different perspective on life.

I'd like feedback on: Anything! But I would like opinions about the dialogue and music if I had to choose :)

I didnt find any dialogue...

Music is soothing, matching the "we are on a long journey" vibe of the small paper boat in the vast sea. Nice

I reached the end, but nothing new happened. Not sure what to do next.

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Hello DustoTail! You were supposed to pass near the litbuoys to activate the dialogue, You cannot activate lets say, buoy 3 without the dialogue of buoy 2.  I've getting some feedback that this was a bit confusing for some players, did you experience this? or was it a glitch I'm not aware of? Thanks for playing!

silly me... didnt notice some buoys were lit. So the entire time, I was just sailing non stop, not strictly following the path as long as im in the correct direction. It might have been due to the same hue with the background, and too many of them, some even not lit though also on the track. But yes, like you said, if one miss just one buoy, one would miss out the rest. So making the the interactable buoys more obvious would be great.

Great! Thanks for the feedback!

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The music is gorgeous, and the writing is thought-provoking, if a little unfocused. Or maybe it's a little too focused. Instead of having a single path, it might be nice to have multiple, give us different perspectives. One thing that might be nice is a story, a fictional (or not so fictional) narrative, or some sort of gameification, a struggle to overcome. That could help with engagement. But as is, it's very relaxing, and I enjoyed my time with it. The visuals are stunning, the music is beautiful. Nicely done.

Thank you so much for your feedback! Glad to hear you enjoyed it :D

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Loved this game! You did a wonderful job creating a soothing atmosphere for your game, the music and dialogue and the whole experience really go well together. Great little message in your game :)