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I find it funny you're bashing on his English when your grammar and punctuation are that of a 6th grader. Don't think so here is a list:

1. Incorrect usage of parenthesis
2. Incorrect usage of comma
3. Capitalization
4. Spelling in at least 4 spots (Example: "if you had a English born and breed proof blahblahblah." The correct way to state that would be: "if you had an English born and bred proof reader blahblahblah."

I can only assume that this is your play to plea at the author NightGamesX to get free inside issues. If not, please stay in school. I digress....

Solid work man, yes there are some grammatical errors here and there, to which if you are using a translator or something like that, having a proof reader of native tongue can be very beneficial indeed.  I definitely feel like the story line is very nuance at this point and I understand why you went this route. The whole scene with the "i hope this baby has an rtx3090 blahblah," clearly shows you know the niche for the current popularity trend. And you are not wrong, but you could do with some deviance and actually do a bit more world/character building. It would make the story that much better and show actual effort in your work aside from your gorgeous renders.

Kudos by the way -----
Stunning renders A+++++++

But if you want the longevity of that fat cash flow I would suggest just a bit more story on the MC and the whole fucking a girl live television is just a bit....it forces a disconnect from the MC and makes any form of flow that was happening completely crash and fall flat. Making it seem like a cheap porno where you "daughter" is the same skank you have seen on 34288934557398 porno's and the believable aspect is ruined completely. So I honestly would remove or re-write that scene if you want viewers to think this is more than just another smash and grab title like all the others that don't stand out from the pack. Which I can tell, your rendering takes a lot of time, if you can't write well or story tell it will end up falling to 50-60% of its potential and price earnings. Unless you hire a writer, which isn't that spendy. Really isn't . Short story authors do a flat rate and as an investment into your product initially you will get much more revenue in the future if you put in the world building aspect. I can 100% guarantee you this.

Just my opinion. :) Keep up those renders and I hope you see this and consider what I proposed. Till next update''````