5.19d in scripts/ending
a couple officials, including a few prominent slave traders, were arrested. Suggest changing to "several officials" instead, since a few is already more than a couple.
Gorn has continued to grow in wealth and power being dominant force in southern regions. power, being a dominant force in
Garhor's death served a grim reminder for those clans willing to oppose Garthor // served as a grim // for the clans willing
In spite of such economic success, Theron's respect has strengthened In spite of =despite, it's the opposite here. I suggest " As a result of this" instead.
Some said she was one of perpetraitors one of the // perpetrators
After short time he managed to seize a considerable wealth. After a short time (I suggest Quite quickly instead)
Their compassion for each other and yourself growing ever stronger. I think it should be "affection" instead
After Cali's disappearance, you stood no chance of hearing from her again. I suggest " you never heard from her again" instead (it could've happened)
While she holds no ill will toward you towards
Chloe eventually grew accustomed to life in your household to living in
What was left of Chloe is still serving clients of certain small brothel attracting customers of a certain (or of a small brothel) // , attracting customers.
Chloe continued to live at Shaliq, in Shaliq
Yris still looking for a ways to survive around Gorn Yris is still // for a way to survive (or for ways to)
After some time Zoe, ran away from Frostford time, Zoe ran (2 times)
Zoe deceased and has been buried at homeland in Frostford buried in her homeland
Ayda returned to her work in Gorn, sending you letter of gratitude. a letter
Her assistant was exceptionally happy and continues to serve his master. her master.
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Contrary to that, she's pretty timid and suggest "Despite that" instead
Few authorities around The Order believe he might be a dangerous hostile. As it is, that sounds like they underestimate him and think he's no threat. If you mean that some people started to notice him and think he's a threat, I recommend "Some authorities" instead.