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Holy moly... I don't even need to read the remaining chapters!~ This is too good! :O

Edit: Just finished reading the other chapters of the story. It was short, but extremely well-written: the unspoken was probably utilized in a number of ways that I never even expected, and to have such a talent as this make's the writer's audience a captive one. 

I even liked the format of this: it was purely literary, so few if any images whatsoever, but they weren't needed. Not only was the format of the writing easily digestible, and not only that, but palatable as well; but also, the imagery was on point, and even exciting at some points, whilst simultaneously keeping with the overall mood of the setting. 

To possess such a balance in writing is a skill that I myself find myself actively taking mental notes upon, even as I write this! Holy moly, this was one heck of a journey to read! Very powerful too! I love that you demonstrated the morality of your characters through actions rather than words! 

I even loved the way you fleshed out your villainess, so as to dispel the stereotypes that most furry visual novels I've seen seem to have about literally half of their female characters, and I for one, stood corrected as I solemnly judged what I thought was going to be yet another one, before reading on and being promptly corrected! This is truly amazing! 

If there's one critique I have for the author though, it's that they are actually really good at adding context where there is none, and yet they don't do enough of it! It's such a shame, really! I was so confused as to who exactly was darting glances at the MP and why! Not that there was anything wrong with that little detail, but it would've made the connection all that much clearer what was actually happening within the story, if that were clarified a bit more. 

Truly amazing work, overall, though! 10/10 would read again!

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Thank you for taking the time to write this! It means a lot to hear people enjoyed the series.

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Ofc~! I really genuinely thoroughly enjoyed reading that! Albeit I'm not the most skilled writer by a longshot, I nevertheless hope that my critique of your writing helps with improving it! I mean, your writing is truly amazing as-is already! May I ask what got you into writing in the first place?

Well, I got really into Furry Visual Novels in the second half of 2019—especially Minotaur Hotel—and learned my enjoyment of reading through that. On Christmas 2020, I wrote my first text: a Minotaur Hotel Christmas Fanfic. After that I wrote many short stories. Then later, I made my projects here on itch.io. I still write short stories on SoFurry and FA, but I plan to make a Visual novel of my own soon.

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That's amazing! Thank you for sharing! Also, sorry for the late reply. I wish you the best of luck & fun with your visual novel.