Unfortunately, this wasn't nearly as immersive as the other CYOA games I've played....
For one, It felt like the story was meant strictly for a more masculine audience, There wasn't really much point in customizing the character's gender. For example, the forced crossdressing to look more cowboy than John Wayne followed by the weird narration that focuses on Dakota's chesticles....oh sorry, her "pendant".
It doesn't help that I immediately wanted to beat the brakes off of her since she looks and behaves 100% like my sister aka the presumptuous peacock I am cursed to share a bloodline with.
Another thing, the romance was really odd and the ending seemed rushed and bland. I felt it was difficult trying to connect with the characters. To each their own, I suppose.
Now before anyone goes off on me about this post, I'm not even done so chill out. Don't get me wrong. Overall, it was a pretty decent, creative, and well-constructed storyline and I highly doubt I could do any better than this. There were hardly any grammar problems at all, but it would have been nice to read the dialogue being spoken by the characters instead of the narrator just stating what they were speaking about and leaving it there. Aside from these small nitpicks, it shows a ton of bright potential. I hope to see more of your work and how it changes over time because I am confident it will become something amazing as long as you keep working at it.
All things considered, I really enjoyed reading it, so thank you for making it. ^_^