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I shrugged it off at first because I thought it was just a couple of flukes in the first updates but there seems to be an awful lot of weird choices of words and small “grammar mistakes” in this vn. I bring this up only because personally I found that this last update (0.3.0e) felt hard to read because of this.

Take these lines for example (all back to back btw):

“Under the coat hid clothes that looked more like ordinary everyday clothes, and still looked quite human-like.”

“Her face is so calm and pleasant that it even seemed familiar to me, to some person from the Earth.”

“But most likely it just seems.”

“What can be noted from the atypical is a different color for each eye. But the shade was not entirely clear, as her glasses also had a color close to her hair color.”

Like, I understand what it says but it’s still very weird to read, and there’s a lot of this kind of stuff. I’m not one to care much for “grammatical errors” and such (because, like, descriptivism and stuff, you know?) but these are the kind that make things a bit unpleasant to read.

(Don’t get me wrong, I like this vn and wrote this comment as feedback, I don’t want it to come across like this was written as an insult to the team behind this vn or anything like that, far from it, I find putting the effort into making a vn and making it free for people to play incredibly cool of y’all)

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oh, I'm actually looking for people who could help me with editing the text, even if a payment is required, since I translate a novel myself, being a writer, having an average level of English

could you help? if yes, please write me:
telegram - @dimmmli
discord - Pumpy_Neil#1663

Anyone (;ω;)

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I am also very invested in this VN, but I found it hard to read, but if you want, I could maybe help you out on some of the translations. I'm not a Russian speaker or anything, nor am I a writer of some sort, but I would like to help you out, so people can read your novel without any problem. I'll send you a friend request on discord, so we can talk about this more in privat.