Would like to know what happened to Nurse Lane, everyone else from the hospital has appeared again in some capacity. Also, Alice has only appeared once, which is fine but I don't think a reason was given.
Also think you might need to add a few extra scenes, even just static images, to help build the relationship between Tina and MC, up to and including Ibiza. At the moment its kind of they like each other and next thing you know she's his soulmate. I accept these things can happen quickly especially when people are in fragile circumstances, ie bad breakup and life altering medical emergency, but I think there still needs to be a bit more bonding time between them, to justify it being more than a few dates and then move on.
I know you've gone back and tinkered with some of the earlier scenes, (I like the changes,) but I hope that the first threesome scene and the first sex scene with Apple are still on the list, at least for android. In the threesome scene the two girls are ok, but the mc looks like he's pale green, and the way Apples hair moves really doesnt work that well when she's riding the MC.
Also phone conversation between MC and Judge Nishimura, the word 'friendh' is misspelled, and later during their date I believe '0racle' needs an O not a 0.