You should have left this bake more before releasing it.
This isn't much but it makes the intro look better.
https://mega.nz/file/uOxUxDxY#MVJLKz7DRlMb7c60j9RD9Q7kLutKR6a7OfqLuU-CwZg
Things you might want to consider:
- Visual Novels should have sound. Even if your budget is low that doesn't mean you can't include free resources, just credit any artist used.
https://freemusicarchive.org/music/Jahzzar/Sele/family_tree_f - Add a custom font so the Title Screen catches the eye as a generic project will look generic.
https://www.fontspace.com/turds-font-f23569 - Include a link to your Itch.io page as easy advertising. Filling in the About info is a good idea too.
- Nameable Protagonist since it's not hard so why not.
- While too early for this tip take a look at how galleries work as it could help you later.
https://www.renpy.org/doc/html/rooms.html#replay
Example: Replay("Ll", scope={"player_name": persistent.player_name or "Jacob"})
This will replay label LI and set the variable player_name to either what's saved in persistent or "Jacob", whichever has content.
Somewhere in the label LI a line "$ renpy.end_replay()" needs to be added to tell Ren'Py when the h-scene ends.
You can review the changes I made with https://winmerge.org
Edit: Noticed you didn't save the choice selection. Used "true_story" in this example. Learn how variables and conditional statements work or the redundancy will start to pile up quickly.
https://mega.nz/file/vW43RQ5K#zba30re883VCB3sSxV5ARakrduVNJIQYVVErqwxaiLo