I recon the scenes are in chronological order, i'm just saying i'd introduce the MC earlier in the game.
At first i thought i'd play as the guy in hoody we see coming to witness the blond scene and my only options were to either watch her get raped or skip the content without the option to intervene. The inability to intervene while a girl gets raped might lessen your audimat and it's the very first scene of the game as things are. Here there is no reason for that to happen except confusion (although some might be turned off by rape as a whole, to each their own i guess).
Then i thought maybe the MC is the blond girl (wich would have been a problem to me cause i don't dig that, that breaks immersion to me). Turns out neither are the MC and the MC is not even aware that this scene happens. So i thought it was a good idea to mention my concerns to you. Then again that's just my honnest opinion. Other than that keep up the good work i'm curious to know what happens next.