Hey Noisy, overall a really nice pitch! The text explains what it is, and your video backs you up. An emoji here and there will help add color and break up the text. I like how you've integrated the hastags into the text too. In terms of the video, your first 6 seconds are dedicated to branding which also happens to be the time you have to grab someone's attention -- I would skip that and get straight into the meat of the video. Music is great too!