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When otter first appears, 2 lines right after he speaks, they are duplicate

"wave of sounds" should be "waves of sound", else something like "the many sounds" ???

When possum first appears "his ear are missing" should be "his ear is missing"

*bites my paw because that CG is priceless!*

Another line referring to Lucas on day 2, is repeated

There are a few "T"'s before words/lines that start with T, so extra T's

I know you are only just skipping to the important stuff, but I feel like day 2 morning before class, even if brief would be nice, as well as something at the restaurant they must have gone to, same goes for day 3, as well as bedtime (though I think that has been ok so far).  Its fine if you gloss over/abbreviate some stuff, but don't omit it entirely.  Can be used for gathering more of Wallace's thoughts on things.

HOLY S***!!! O..O ..........

Well can't call that a cliffhanger if there nothing to hang onto, now can ya? ^^;

Damn... that went peddle to the mettle!, but now wondering if I go back to that second decision point, does it change what happens somewhat?  I think I'll check!

If you do want to make a discord server, I'd say do it as of or after build 3, but before build 4.  That way there is time to build incentive/following for both reader and creators.

Thanks for the mistakes! I think they likely just occurred during the rewrite phase. As for the whole missing scenes, I really wanted build 1 to reach that horror segment within its first build, so I cut out a lot of fluff.

Sound reason! My ears are still ringing!