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Hi fakeshadyemi!
Thanks for sparing your time to write me this review!
I really enjoyed reading your comments and critiques, especially the last part, but let's start from number one!

1. First of all, congrats on finishing all three routes and thank you for giving all my boys a chance ^///^
You've grasped the essence of Reksa and Mitra--as for Rama... wow, you're the first person to suggest a reborn ark/plot! 
I did consider to do a 'make-over' for him when he was miraculously cured, but when I thought about it... hmm... how do I explain this... his scars are a part of him. While it might remind him of the past and put him in pain, it is something that cannot be erased/instantly disappear. He must overcome them and come out stronger than before ><

Still, thank you for the input! 

2. It was a gamble for me back then since I didn't know whether people will like my 'originality' or not x_x
I mean, I was trying to combine Indonesian culture + fantasy + anime, which is a strange combination. But the warm welcome I've received made me have no regrets :'D 

Thank you for giving my VN a chance and I'm glad to hear you had fun! *bows*

3. You noticed the NPCs! *happy dance*
Not many people mentioned them so I'm really happy you took notice of them ^///^ I wholeheartedly agree! While their role is not much, in my heart, they are still as important as the main characters. 

I also agree that good music is important! Sometimes, I spent a long time to find an alternative just because I thought this one music isn't fitting or being repetitive (used too much). 

Last but not least, yes! I do agree that Tamara could've been better at conveying/hinting her traumatic past. It was one of my dilemma--actually, still is. Back then, I didn't know how to tell her story without making it look like a filler or distracting the readers from the bachelors' + the main story. My priority back then was to tell the bachelors' story and the main story, so Tamara's story ended up being... neglected? I'm sorry Tamara Q_Q

"It would've made sense to me to know more about Tamara's family in depth with Mitra's route and in Reksa's give full depth about her own father (it would've been cool to see Tamara and Reksa talk about their fathers throughout that route for example."

Honestly, this hits me hard! If only you were there to make this suggestion back then, I would've definitely tried to implement it!
Alas, I've closed the book for Winged Ones and currently, I have my hands full with Bermuda... 

As for the issue with the Goddess and Her sending Tamara back...
Well, I think it's not easy to pick a new world over the world you grew up in? >< I mean, I get what you're saying. The new world is so beautiful with caring friends and even a lover. Why would I go back to that bleak world? To get back at my uncle? I'm afraid it's not as simple... Tamara grew up in that world, her parents' graves are there (I believe I mentioned this in the game? O_O;), and if she choose to abandon it, it will feel as if she will abandon her past and everything she is familiar with. 

Still, I get what you mean. I think it's my fault for not being able to convey Tamara's story in better words/way QuQ
Thank you for pointing this out! *bows*

I will carry this critiques in my heart and strive to be a better author! Let the Winged Ones stay in its original form, with its strengths, weaknesses, and I shall learn from it.

Again, thank you for dropping by and for telling me how I can become better^///^
Here's hoping to see you again in the future,
xoxo,

SweetChiel

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Hey, I just want to briefly reply to some things:


1. Nono I totally agree on the "Rama's past and his scars are his to bear and overcome" and his scars shouldn't magically disappear! I guess I just wanted spirit Ayu and Teal (I'm assuming they were the Servants that healed him) to do a Jackie-chan-chyropractice-move on his wings and get them working again so that I'd enjoy a wing wrap with Tamara in that bed or some safe-ish (xD) durian picking with the kids in the end - but I totally respect and agree with the way you handled it (this is just the fangirl in me fangirling)

2/3. Doing something for fun is always the right way to go about things (imo at least) - you nailed it, never lose that, and enjoy making Bermuda, because if you do, we will too!

Also, don't worry about Tamara's backstory (my full attention wasn't on her to begin with, if you know what I mean ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)) - everything you make is a learning experience and moving forward only gets you better and better

Cheers!

fakeshadyemi