Looks promising, art is quite good too! Though this project needs better proof-reading, and I'd suggest tying to look for a proof-reader (or beta-reader) that speaks and writes English at a native level, if possible. I don't think I need to add anything else, as the comment below summarizes the areas to improve quite well. Keep up the good work, and please try to improve the areas mentioned below. :)
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Thank you and yes I am working on it, also you're reading the alpha as it is not even V1.0 yet XD
But I'm fairly certain of my skills in English though I might need to warm up a little bit more to get to a good rhythm of consistency and clerity in writing again since I stopped writing about 3 or 4 years ago. So... Yeah... I forgot most of my skills, tee hee!
My specialty is in American accents and people could never really tell that they're not talking to a native speaker but I don't like the accent much because it's... Let's say restricting when it comes to more emotional stuff as the dialect specializes more in "telling" than showing.