Oh haha! I love this! Okay...
Haha yes, I'm always trying to think of the wackiest expressions for them I'm glad you like them.
An LSD trip while parkouring over graphite walls???😂 lol I totally see it, love the way you described that. I went all the way to the moon with the color theme.🔴🟠🟡🟢🔵🟣⚫⚪
Glad you like MCs look, she gets a bunch of outfits in the full game, they all do. You're gonna love their other looks too.
💰👑Leo's a whole ass vibe, I'm glad you like him. He's a breeze to write, I enjoy his chill scenes versus those other crazies. (Zayn)
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Alright, a critique essay, let me get ready🧐 (p.s. I appreciate critiques too, no worries)
I know the colors can be a bit overwhelming in some areas of the story, but it won't always be so loud in other areas of the game so I hope it's not TOO disorienting.
I tend to over-design at times, the earlier design of the texts boxes where also said to be difficult to read against, the redesign proved to be much better but it still becomes difficult to balance as many colors as the game has without things becoming too complex or blending with similar shades. Like MC in the purple-ish bus. 💜
The demo is short, but as the story is laid out, if I tried to extend it to another good resting point, I felt the demo would've been too long cause a lot takes place after the scenes following the demo. Alternatively, I also could've cut it off on a very cliffhanger part to keep it at a decent length but without finding a good stopping point. I may release an extended demo closer to the full release but I'm not fully decided on that just yet.
some color tuning is definitely in order for the textboxes, thank you for your suggestion. I was considering making it so each character has a different color text as well that makes the words easier to read on their respective textboxes, I'll also experiment with neutral colors as you suggested.
There's redundant & misplaced narration you say,🤔 I'll definitely be going back into the story with that in mind, I'll do my best to improve in that, thank you. This was actually very valuable input and not at all useless, I know the story can get pretty confusing with the neutral and mc narrators and was actually recently fixed in the project so that now the perspective and narrator shift to whoever's in an active scene. I'm trying to get rid of the neutral narrator entirely to eliminate this confusion. So don't worry, I felt that too and I'm working on fixing it now.
You like Ace, do you🕷❤ He's my favorite too😊 His think text is dark red, and when a character is thinking I cut the opacity down to 50% I can see how that would be hard to read especially for less saturated characters like Ace, this is one of the color tuning issues I'll definitely get around to correcting. No one likes to be too aware of the text when reading visual novels but that tends to happen in situations like that so it will be fixed.
extras have a much easier time having their text readable because of how simple their textbox is, I've been brainstorming on ways to fix this for the main characters without having to compromise the design of their text boxes. this will be better in the full game, I assure you. There are a lot of characters to fine-tune on that front.
The choices screen cutting in so abruptly is also something I want to fix, (I've been trying to figure out how. lol 😅) don't worry, that'll be fixed too.
Thank you for that thorough review, I mean it. I like how transparent you were with sharing your experience with me and it gave me a lot to think about.😊 There's always room for improvement.
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