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Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
Oh, this is hard. It's honestly a toss-up between Mitra and Reksa. I'm tempted to just go with Mitra, but that's a bit biased since I played his route last. I actually cried towards the end of Reksa's route when a certain spoiler-y thing happened, and he was so sweet, and I was just overcome by all the feels....

What makes you consider to play this game?
Well, lets be honest: the art was the first thing to catch my eye. What made me continue to play this game was the story and characterization. The story is unique and engaging, and the characters feel like people rather than archetypes or cardboard cut-outs.

Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
This is a beautifully done VN. 9/10, would play again (and again and again and...).

Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
I did find some of what I assume were errors in word choice, which I assume are there because English isn't your first language. They weren't so bad that I didn't know what you meant, but they created some unintentionally funny moments. I commented on your DevArt regarding this, so I won't go into that further here.

Another thing that would be nice is some closure at the end. I was hoping for a Big Damn Kiss or some sort of lovey scene after choosing to stay, but I never got one; I chose to stay, and the game ended. I kind of felt like that dumped me out of the story rather than letting me down gently (for lack of a better metaphor). It's not a huge issue or anything, but there you are.

I think it would be nice if there were more variation in the story itself when you play different routes. I realize that this would be a LOT of extra work for you, and it's not really a big deal, but, hey, you asked.

I don't know if this is a flaw or not, but it kind of seems like Tamara is supposed to end up with Mitra (considering a few scenes that were constant throughout all three routes and some Tamara-backstory-revelation that only occurs in Mitra's route). I'm not sure if you intended for that or not (or if I'm just reading too much into it, which is entirely possible).

Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
I will definitely buy it! You've shown in this VN that you are a pretty masterful storyteller (and heartstring-puller...), and you said that it would probably be around $10-15. That's definitely worth it! I can't wait! <3

Hi Briling thanks for reviewing!

I'm very happy that you like my art-style and even say the story is good >\\\< I'm also happy that Mitra is getting quite popular <3 but I guess Rama is not your type? XD


Grammar is still my biggest enemy and I still have rooms for improvement in my writing skills so I hope you'll be patient for my next project since I'm going to take my time learning >:')

Oh and after the credits, there should be epilogues for each bachelors o.o; I have no idea how you missed it since everyone else seems to get it x.x

Oooh, I hope it's not a bug since Ren'py is not supposed to have many bugs ><;

Also, thank you for your support! I'll do my best to reach your expectation and more in my next project! :")

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

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Yeah, I'm not terribly fond of Rama. Sorry. I just don't have the patience for his shenanigans, and there was one point where he did something that REALLY pissed me off that I won't mention because of spoilers. After that point, though, I was just like, "NOPE. DONE." I just felt so outraged by it, and it was never really addressed afterwards (which I understand, since it was done at a point of super high tension towards the end of the plot, but it doesn't stop me from getting worked up about it).

Your grammar didn't actually bother me or keep me from enjoying the story, so please don't be too self-conscious about it. There were just a few instances that I noticed where the words you used were a little strange for the context of what was happening (and those times were mostly because of alternate meanings of those words and slang terminology). If you like, I would be happy to help you with things like that. Then again, no one else seems to have noticed, so maybe I only noticed because I'm kind of a word nerd. Honestly, I have so much respect for everything you've done already; this is a very minor thing.

Ahh, I see about the epilogues now. The credits rolling is usually a signal to me that the game/movie is over. My mistake. Thanks for letting me know, though! Now I have an excuse to play it again right away! Heehee! <3