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I think the idea is solid and love the "that's too much rule" but the tone feels off to me--can't put my finger on why. While the rules are light--leaving me little to talk about--I would like to bring up a few things I noticed: the reliance on google and the angel types.

We all know how to google, yes. But telling your players to google something kinda does the idea of a two-page rpg a disservice. If I have to google things to understand something in your game, then there is a failure in the document to fully explain the issue. Relying on google to fill in the gaps feels wrong.

And the angel types would honestly be fine--maybe a bit problematic, but fine--if not for the inclusion of Cenobites. Cenobites are fictional creatures from a Hell Dimension of Clive Barker's design. How this presents an issue is the second someone googles them, it dramatically shifts the tone from demons trying to escape from angels, to demons trying to escape from demons.

That makes sense; I just had the vision of cenobites in my mind when thinking about the angels so decided that's something they could look like :). Regarding safety tools, I suppose I could try to include actual safety tools, but I don't feel qualified to come up with my own, and to not do them a disservice would probably take up a whole page at least, so I decided to defer to people who actually know what they're doing, and I assume people can find the right stuff.

Oh, also, I was trying to figure out what would be problematic and so the only word that seemed like it might be was statuesque, which I just found out has other connotations than "looking like a statue." I'll change that to statue-like.