Great game, excellent storyline. I've been reading Sci-fi for many years, and love the "what if Luke did more than kiss Leia" angle... <<<SPOILER>>
I just finished through the call to kill the creature that almost got Cam and am very surprised he didn't think to use the fungus in the caves to knock out the creature the first time (hint, hint!!!) And now he and Nadya know the creature's hunting ground it should be relatively easy to get trapped again in the cave but capture the beast by putting it to sleep. That oughta make the Priestess take notice...
Can't wait for more! Sisterly Lust too!!!
Fin
(I'm also a practiced copy and proofreader and would love to volunteer to help polish your narrative in a few spots to really improve the feel.)