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Ive enjoyed what Ive played of it so far, Im curious as to roughly how many episodes you have in mind for the finished story?

Oh and I must admit after some of the events in the later episodes I do have this hope that the MC can convince Luis to offer his services as test subject for Ash, mistakes to be corrected (by Liz?) or Luis gets a date with Ash, his choice. Id also like to see Luis ace being tested by Liz... I think that would be hilarious.

Ive noticed a number of spelling mistakes and the like, how best to submit them?

Grimlar2 years ago (1 edit)

In Chapter 4 The scene title Emily Fopar ought to be Emily Faux Pas.

Grimlar2 years ago(+1)

Also Chapte 4 living room scene, after Luis hands you the dvd, his left eye (right as you look at him) is not pointing in the right direction.

Grimlar2 years ago (1 edit) (+1)

The name of Liz's shop appears to be missing a 'u' the
door says parlor, should be parlour.

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My apologies I should have guessed straight away that you are an American or at least using an American dictionary.

Your usage of 'step foot into' instead of 'step into' or 'set foot into' would also back that up.

Whilst Im bringing these thngs up you also use 'Sush' instead of 'Shush' on several occasions.

Also whilst Emily is describning what happened after she knocked the MC out with the shampoo bottle, Ashley describes Em as 'viscous', I am assuming that you were going for 'vicious'.

Ashlyn, whilst on her why to the surveillance room describes Ashley as her 'Bis Sis' instead of 'Big Sis'

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