The name of Liz's shop appears to be missing a 'u' the
door says parlor, should be parlour.
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My apologies I should have guessed straight away that you are an American or at least using an American dictionary.
Your usage of 'step foot into' instead of 'step into' or 'set foot into' would also back that up.
Whilst Im bringing these thngs up you also use 'Sush' instead of 'Shush' on several occasions.
Also whilst Emily is describning what happened after she knocked the MC out with the shampoo bottle, Ashley describes Em as 'viscous', I am assuming that you were going for 'vicious'.
Ashlyn, whilst on her why to the surveillance room describes Ashley as her 'Bis Sis' instead of 'Big Sis'