Would just like to say thank you for this. Enjoyed it very much.
I thought the story was well done, the little extra touches, the humour, sweet moments, Victorian erotica and opera, all helped to round out the experience for me.
My favourite character would have to be Bella, on either route, although I would find it hard to explain why.
In terms of comments/suggestions:
There are still quite a few language errors in the English version. I appreciate it isnt your first language. What would be the best way to contact you to discuss helping to polish the language? I assume that there is main script that translators have used?
I would also suggest that Riley needs an extra scene after she has joined the family, both Iris and Adriana have a scene with someone other than the MC to cement their place, but Riley doesnt have that. I would suggest Liza as one candidate, perhaps she would like to thank Riley for putting up with Brody and helping the MC to uncover the truth. Perhaps Riley could be experimenting with her little friend from the sex shop and Liza expresses curiosity? Having said that, Im sure you would be able to come up with something better.
In terms of Bella's storyline, I would suggest that there needs to be a little more crossover between her two storylines. After all, we start with the same Bella and the MC is still a pervert who cares a lot about his girls. In other words the Romantic Bella needs to corrupt a little more, and the Sub Bella ought to have at least one scene where she uses the safeword for a more normal encounter. Perhaps one where she and the MC discuss their hopes for the future, because I doubt that Sub Bella has given up completely on her hopes of marriage and children and I very much doubt that the MC would refuse her, even if the children only turned up in the epilogue.
My final comment would be that I think that the shift from solo relationships to group orgies was a little too quick. To be honest I found the orgies less involving, too much of a dilution of focus perhaps. I think I would have preferred a little more time with the girls bonding in pairs/threesomes before moving on to the group sessions.
Possible bugs/ interface issues
In terms of the epilogue, I have to ask, do none of the side characters get pregnent if Bella is on the Sub route?
I would also suggest that on Android the text is sometimes a little hard to read. Would it be possible to make it a little larger and darken the background a bit more? Or at least have an option to do so?
Finally, if you accidentally trigger the save dialog on the autosave page, there seems to be no way out of it as you cant actually save on that page, but you cant dismiss the dialog box either.
Having said all of that. I do just want to say again, thank you for this story. Really enjoyed it, looking forward to the next one.
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As an aside, have you considered releasing a text only version as an erotica story on Amazon? You already have the storyline, you would mostly just need to add a bit more description to the scenes.