I went ahead and made the script changes based on your suggestions and it only took me 20 minutes. I believe these small changes will help the flow of text in the places that you pointed out and hopefully contribute to a more immersive experience overall. I get too stuck in my own head when I creating this stuff so I really appreciate you sharing your thoughts. I'm doing this to connect with others through my characters and stories so even if my replies can be slow at times, I am always super appreciative of anyone who gives me a bit of their time. There's lots to do on the internet, so that you chose to spend some time here means a lot to me *^_^*