I'm glad you found some of it evocative and I feel you on some stuff taking a second pass to process or misreading, I try to err on the side of "shorter things that take a second pass reading over vs longer but slightly clearer" and honestly that may be a tic that is kinda trying.
The corporate mind control thing is intended more as a reference to the various conspiracy theories about subliminal messages since that's always fascinated me.
Anyway, sorry if that sounded defensive (not the intent), thank you so much for reading!
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Thought of you today: https://xkcd.com/2488/ (see alt text)
Thanks again for writing this!