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What can I say... I recorded this game the day it was launched and just posted now... and well... the game is not that good (In this version of course), a lot of grammar errors, and the history is not well telled... But the history is promising, if you correct some errors and explain the history a little better, the game will be pretty good, I will talk more about what I liked and disliked in my review, good luck with your game!

Ahh I see that's also the first release 0.1, which had several things fixed for 0.1.5 and was also in 1080 rather than 720. Grammar understandable not so great at that, some changes where made in 0.1.5 also on this, but even more corrections and changes to grammar for the prologue in 0.2 release.

As for the history, are you referring to the backstory of MC and how it led him to the move etc?

Sorry for the late reply, I'm having some problems with my PC since I sended you my review...

Yes and no, I was talking about the beginning that usually has a narrator that resumes the backstory of the MC or even the MC does that, there where some errors but nothing to worry about, but the rest of the story was FULL of grammar errors, and I couldn't understand nothing of it but it seems that you already worked that out... I think you did read my review right? I said everything that needed to be said there ;)

Ahh yes, I had skipped over doing much on the backstory as most of the one's I've seen hadn't worried much about that either and they're quite large, or they go through more of the MC's backstory throughout the story itself when they talk more about themselves.

My assumption with that was for most part didn't seem many were all that concerned with the backstory unless it had more relevance to the current story.

However as for saying you couldn't understand nothing of it, that I found surprising as overall feedback from others I've spoken to enjoyed it and eagerly awaiting the next update, none mentioning my poor grammar or at least not to the extent you have.

That being said, anything released from 0.2 onwards will have been passed through an editor to ensure better grammar upon release, this was started after 0.1.5 and as nobody seemed that concerned with it, I felt it wouldn't worth re-releasing again for the grammar when people seemed to get from it what was intended.

Back on the topic of the backstory, I will look into this more and see what I could some up with, either adjust the Prologue or do the other idea I mentioned and bring more of the MC's backstory into conversations and possibly flashbacks of his old life while talking about it.

Oops, I think I misinterpret my words, sometimes my engrish is very broken so excuse me about it... When I said that I didn't understand anything about the story I was saying something like "I could understand what he said and mean but when he explained I couldn't." like... it's hard to make a example... It's more something like I could understand 50% but the other half I couldn't. I think you get what I'm trying to say... I hope so. The history looks good and promising but if you don't explain it well it will impact the history in a bad way. I did see a lot of people just skipping the backstory of something that is not really important but you still need to explain it to a extent to make the history a little better to understand, but I think I don't need to worry about that, I think you have everything at control.